Sloppy Writing = Sloppy Thinking
This morning, I stumble upon the Web site of Nelson & Carver, P.S. I read the About Us page, and I find this:
Our Escrow Team is comprised of highly competent individuals who are prepared to expertly handle your real estate transactions.
Fine (except for the caps), but then I read this:
Our legal team is highly skilled in their fields. When you need an attorney to represent you, you are hiring professionals who truly care about your objectives.
Not so fine.
A team is one thing — singular — so mentioning how highly skilled they are in their fields makes not much sense. And when you need an attorney, you hire one. You don’t hire a bunch of them.
And — if you’re like me — you don’t hire them if they’re so sloppy in their presentation.
As I see it, the firm’s About Us page is a warning sign to potential clients.
13 February 2009 at 8:09
> > Our Escrow Team is comprised of
> Fine
Fine if you are using the patent law definition for “comprise” as an extensible list; not fine if you expect comprise to be followed by a complete list.
Or has the world changed while I wasn’t looking, again?