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In our last post, we discussed some ways in which an editor can make law firm publications look more professional. Let’s continue that discussion.
The following is from a firm’s description of its antitrust and trade regulation practice:
A number of typographical problems to notice:
- Hyphens in place of dashes.
- Extra space after the hyphens in the second line.
- Loose word spacing in the third line.
Here’s what this might look like after an editor touches it:
The typographical problems are gone. The hyphens have been replaced with en dashes, and the first of those dashes has been set in a more appropriate place. The word spacing in the first line of the bulleted point is much improved. And that pesky dangling participle (including) has been replaced with a nice lead-in to the bullets. Finally, the United States was replaced with domestically to make the elements of the parenthetical phrase parallel (i.e, they’re both adverbs).
